DRAFT The Turning Season Page 28 Chapter 4 The scent of warm honey and fresh bread filled the air as Lila pushed open the bakery door. A tiny brass bell jingled overhead, and she was instantly wrapped in the cozy hum of morning chatter. Sunlight streamed through the wide windows, catching on floating bits of flour and turning them into tiny golden flecks. Lila! Just in time, called Mr. Pendleton from behind the counter. His apron was dusted with flour, and a smudge of raspberry jam streaked his sleeve. Ive got something special for you today. Lila grinned, stepping closer. Let me guess another attempt at your famous blueberry scones?” He huffed in mock offense. Ill have you know, this batch is a masterpiece. He placed a warm, sugar - dusted scone onto a plate and slid it toward her. The smell alone made her mouth water. As she took her first bite, the bakery door opened again. A rush of cool morning air swept inside, and with it came Jonah, breathless and grinning. Lila! You wont believe what just arrived on the morning train. Lila swallowed quickly, curiosity sparking in her chest. What is it?” Jonah held up a small envelope, its edges crisp and clean. A letter. From the capital. For a moment, the bakery seemed to hush around them. The capital? Lila wiped her hands on a napkin and reached for the envelope, her heart pounding with a mix of excitement and uncertainty. Whatever was inside, she had a feeling life was about to change. Commented [VG1]: This description lends an optimistic, happy vibe to the scene. Love it. Commented [KP2R1]: This is setting the scene for a critical moment perfectly! Commented [KP3]: You mention raspberry here and then switch to blueberry. I feel like matching the berries would be less distracting here. Commented [KP4]: I find this phrase confusing. When you say "attempt" I picture him struggling. When you say famous it makes me feel like he has the recipe perfected. Commented [VG5]: cut "alone" It will be simpler and clearer. Commented [KP6]: You were building towards this in the first few chapters and I am thankful that you set this critical moment in the bakery.

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